* Posts by amirK

1 post • joined 13 Aug 2010

Android gets talk-tastic Froyo upgrade

amirK
FAIL

Writing advice

Don't know why, but I just had the urge to edit this article.

"Android users lucky enough to get a Froyo upgrade have been busy talking to their telephones, as Google adds voice commands to its platform."

--First of all, unless you've witnessed people talking to their phones this is a lie. Second of all, the seoncd clause ("as Google adds") implies that people are talking to their phones at the same time Google is in the process of adding these new features.

"Users downloading the latest update to Android, version 2.2 codenamed Froyo (following Google's alphabetically-ordered-snacks naming system), are finding that if they're all alone then they can always speak to their phones."

--Filler sentence. This doesn't add anything to the article.

"It might be hard to imagine people walking around talking to their telephones, but it's worth remembering that a decade or so ago it was hard to imagine people walking around talking on their telephones."

--more useless fluff

"as evidenced by Cupertino's purchase of Siri in April."

--Apple is not a country. You can't use Cupertino as a stand-in for Apple.

"in a variety of comedy accents."

--You mean "comical accents." But comical is a stupid way to say funny, so just say funny.

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